Cat Spirit
Prisca was staying with her grandparents. Her grandparents had a cat for some years now. Prisca was 15 years old. One day the cat ran and was killed instantly by a moving vehicle. The cat was a playful animal. The cat was always play with Prisca, climbing all over her body. Prisca loved the cat.
Is being years since the cat died. Prisca is now a grown up girl now, she is 30 years old. Whenever she sits in the palour, she will hear the cat's sound around other rooms. If she stand up to check where is the sound coming from, the sound will disappear. No body in the family hears this sounds except Prisca. Some she imagine seeing the cat physically.
Her grandparents died after they confessed they saw the cat. People think they were hallucinating.
Prisca was the only one left in the house. She thinks she is bond to the cat's soul. Maybe the cat is not really dead, she thought.
Although she only heard sounds, she has not seen the cat. She told people that the cat spirit is still alive but people won't believe her. All she know is, she keep hearing the cat sound around othrt rooms. She know what she heard.
This was her experience with the cat's spirit.
You create a convincing extraordinary experience in this story. Most people have have felt the presence of something that wasn't there, but maybe was. Our eyes, our ears, our senses are not always reliable guides. In this case, Prisca trusts her sense of the cat over what 'reality' suggests to be true. Her sense is reinforced by the grandparents' report.
There are a few spelling errors in the story that interfere with the mood you hope to create. If you run this story through an online, free, grammar application the quality of your writing would improve.
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Cat spirit. I don't know about that, but I wouldn't want to live in that house :))
Lol me too, thanks for the comments.
I love stories where only one person is able to see something - like a ghost or spirit, or an invisible friend. In this case the grandparents had seen it too, but they are no longer around, so she is on her own... just wondering whether the cat is a figment of her imagination. Interesting story, @cryptofi. Keep it up!
Thanks for the comments, I'm glad you liked it.
In this text you elaborate an interesting story, @cryptofi .
You dare to give more writing space to your imagination and make the reader stay with you, waiting to see how you solve the cat's disappearance: is he gone completely or does he still need the closeness of the person who loved him?
I like how you manage the exercise of putting yourself in Prisca's thoughts:
Continue with your writing exercises.
Thanks dear for the comments, I'm glad you liked it.
This is a beautiful story.
A cat that has a spirit. Damn! I like your imagination, the good thing was the cat wasn't haunting anyone, just showing itself and making noises. Wishing it could come back to itself body and be with Prisca .
Thanks bro for the kind comments.
This was an enjoyable little tale. I really like tales about animal's and their spirits.
What I noticed is that you have some grammar errors. I think a second round of editing or free tools like Grammarly can truly help with that. I don't mean to be mean in any way, but since my writing used to suffer from similar problems, I can't help but point them out.
I really hope you keep writing and I'd like to hear more stories from you!